Case study: the wasted data problem


Two ways to convey 'the problem' in a frontal presentation

Option 1

Option 2

Option 2 FEELS better.
(Hit 'reply' and tell me if you disagree)

The question is why?
What makes it a better communication?

The graphics are fancier, but that's only the expression of deeper differences in approach.
For example:

1. General vs Situation-Specific.
Option 1 creates a reading experience, unadjusted for a frontal presentation.
Option 2 gives the speaker room to talk by keeping text minimal, making it easier to consume.

2. Narrow vs Common Denominator.
Option 1 uses jargon & bullet points, leaving out plenty of context - making the issue feel narrow or obscure.
Option 2 aims at the widest possible audience, ensuring everyone gets it.

3. Propositional vs Direct Communication.
Option 1 describes the problem from a distance.
Option 2 adopts the user’s viewpoint, immersing you in the problem so the pain point is unmistakable.

The takeaway?

By shifting the emphasis from the CONTENT of the pitch to its CONTEXT, Option 2 makes the issue clear, memorable, and relatable.

Yours,
Sagi

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